Jul 14, 2010

sand between my fingers

This was inspired by my friend Jen D who recently wrote a Pantoum as well. I don't write poetry much but just thought I'd give it a shot anyway. Not the greatest...but oh well, at least I wrote a poem. ;)


you & me
what we had
and what could have been
questions...

what we had
was it just me?
questions
for the answers that will never be heard

was it just me?
the reminiscences surround me
for, the answers that will never be heard
are haunting

the reminiscences surround me
but were you ever here?
are haunting
memories worth holding on to?

but were you ever here?
i don't see you any more
memories worth holding on to,
slipping like sand beween my fingers

i don't see you anymore
the questions are pointless
slipping like sand between my fingers
you & me


3 comments:

Jen D said...

Goosebump raising, I love it! I love how you got more meaning out of each repeated line by changing the meaning or punctuation slightly.

Legal Alien said...

Thank you Jen! I actually had fun writing this :)

Vikram said...

enough said